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Kiss me with vodka tainted lips
And remind me of your love
Remind me of that hideous beast
That snapped the twig and ate the dove

Kiss me with vodka tainted lips
I'll watch your eyes as they dance
It seems a tragedy to notice that
You need a liquid to remain in a trance

Kiss me with vodka tainted lips
But mind the whiplike tongue
The one that lashes at every fact
A mind so old, for one so young

Kiss me with vodka tainted lips
And mold my mind like dough
Blow it up, and explode the myth
To hold friends farther than the foe

Kiss me with vodka tainted lips
And condemn my worthless soul
To wonder who it is I need to
Complete the puzzle, make me whole

Kiss me with vodka tainted lips
Used to protect us from the cold
The bottle stands on the mantelpiece
The dregs swirl as the rest takes hold
Written September '08 in a slightly angry mood.

One of the pieces I've thrown up in different places around the internet, so I'll be interested to read what you lovely people think of it.

Comments welcome :)
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Pamplemousse-6 Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2010
I love it. I think the repetition of the line "kiss me with vodka tainted lips" actually helps to keep the reader engaged. But to each his (or her) own, I suppose. =D
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padshiyangel Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2010
Thank you very much...y'know when you get a line repeating in your head? That was the line, hence why I repeated it =P
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zomiefromuranus Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2010
I remember you sending this to me... still have it saved on my computer.
Every time I go back and read it again, I still find it amazing.
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padshiyangel Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2010
*blushes* Thank you :)
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Dark-kunor Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2010  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I love it, though I did not like on piece.
The usage of the sentence "Kiss me with vodka tainted lips" imho it was a bit to much to start every piece with it. But I still like it very much.
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padshiyangel Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2010
The idea of the repetition is that it constantly refocuses the poem back onto its original "purpose" and message. But I can see why it's off-putting, I'll bear that in mind.
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black-halo-angel Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
...beautiful. Just....beautiful. It has a slight feel of despair and tragedy over it, and some lines in there are just :heart:.
A mind so old, for one so young just says so incredibly much, I love how you can put a story behind so few words.
Well done! :)
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padshiyangel Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2010
There is a story behind it, hence the feeling of a story behind the words =P

But thank you for the compliments ^^
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black-halo-angel Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Ooooo, interesting. Do tell. =P

Again, you're welcome ^^
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padshiyangel Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2010
I'd rather not talk about the story on here, if you don't mind xD
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